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Chain Chain Style !
Mon Apr 10, 2017 1:16 pmChain Style
Fighting Style: Chain Style
Weapon Utilization: Chain
Specialization: Mixture Of Both
Description: Carrying a specialized steel metal large chain that's 100m length and 500lb in weight. The chain can be used as a binding or slashing style of fighting. The chain can even form spikes all around itself when called for and these metal spikes are 5 inches in length.
Techniques
(The following techniques can either be all devil fruit techniques, or a combination of devil fruit, and natural/weapon techniques)
- Light Attacks:
Chain Style Steel Bind!
Technique Level: 1
Technique Range: 10m
Technique Cooldown: 4
Technique Duration: 1
Technique Buffs: 10% on attack on weapon
Technique Debuffs: 10% on defense on user
Technique Description: The user is able to throw the other end of his chain to tight around any part of the body. If pulled even tighter, this can lead to blood circulation cut off or worse.
Chain Style Steel Spike Cannon!
Technique Level: 1
Technique Range: 100
Technique Cooldown: 2
Technique Duration: N/A
Technique Buffs: N/A
Technique Debuffs: N/A
Technique Description: a ball of chain will fire out of his body or arms, being the size of a basketball and doing blunt damage instead of slashing.
Chain Style Chain Steel Spike Body
Technique Level: 10
Technique Range: 100m
Technique Cooldown: 3
Technique Duration: N/A
Technique Buffs: N/A
Technique Debuffs: N/A
Technique Description: The user will push forth his chain to wrap around the enemy's body entirely with spikes added to the chains.
- Medium Attacks:
Chain Style The Iron Whip
Technique Level: 1
Technique Range: 10m
Technique Cooldown: 7
Technique Duration: 2
Technique Buffs: 10% Attack To Weapon
Technique Debuffs: 10% Defense To User
Technique Description: The user is able to bring forth his chain and whip his enemies.
Technique Name: Chain Style The Steel Whip!
Technique Level: 5
Technique Range: 50m
Technique Cooldown: 7
Technique Duration: 1
Technique Buffs: 20% Attack to weapon
Technique Debuffs: 20% Reflex to user
Technique Description: The user will use his chain as a whip, which he will then use slash type strokes in order to cause pain to his enemies.
- Heavy Attacks:
Chain Style Ten Whips
Technique Level: 1
Technique Range: 10m
Technique Cooldown: 8
Technique Duration: 1
Technique Buffs: 10% to attack weapon
Technique Debuffs: 10% to defense user
Technique Description: the user is able to whip is chains ten times to his enemies with spikes on them.
Technique Name: Chain Style One Hundred Spike Whips!
Technique Level: 10
Technique Range: 100m
Technique Cooldown: 10
Technique Duration: 2
Technique Buffs: 30% Attack , 30% Defense [To Weapon // To User]
Technique Debuffs: 30% Reflex , 30% Will Power [To User // To User]
Technique Description: A perfect attack and defense type of technique, the user will move his arm at an extreme fast rate of performing 100 whips. Spikes being added to the technique, he will continue to strike till the third digit.
- AOE Attacks:
Technique Name: Chain Style The Spinning Spike Whip!
Technique Level: 1
Technique Range: Self
Technique Radius: 2.5
Technique Cooldown: 25
Technique Duration: 6
Technique Buffs: 25% Attack , 25% Defense [To Weapon//To Self]
Technique Debuffs: Reflex 50% [To Self]
Technique Description: The user will twirl there body in a fast and spinning a 360 motion. The chain they hold in their hand will be in a straight line and continue to spin along with the user. The spikes being added will leave a lasting impression on those who challenge the technique head on.
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Gray
[tracker=/t131-tracker-gray-starks#504]
Name : Gray
Epithet : "The Conqueror"; "Black Fist"
Age : 49
Height : 10'2" (310 cm)
Weight : 1043 lbs (473 kg)
Species/Tribe : Cyborg Human
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Lurking Legend (Former Yonkou)
Crew : Black Fist Pirates (Destroyed)
Ship : Sangria's Vane (Destroyed)
Crew Role : Captain (Former)
Devil Fruit : Pressure-Pressure Fruit
Bounty : [ber=r] 5,000,000,000
EXP Bonus : +0.20 (to all allies)
Income Bonus : +0.20
Shop Discount : -30%
Balance : [bel] 25,000,000,000
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Re: Chain Chain Style !
Mon Apr 10, 2017 5:37 pm[Comments are in orange.]
Yurei Yagami wrote:Chain Style
Fighting Style: Chain Style
Weapon Utilization: Chain
Specialization: Mixture Of Both
Description: Carrying a specialized steel metal large chain that's 10ft in length and 200lbs in weight. The chain can be used as a binding or slashing style of fighting. The chain can even form spikes all around itself when called for and these metal spikes are 5 inches in length.[Keep in mind that with this weapon, it will not make sense for you to bind anyone more than 10 feet away from you. Also, any slashes sent farther than 10 feet from you will become flying slashes.]
Techniques
(The following techniques can either be all devil fruit techniques, or a combination of devil fruit, and natural/weapon techniques)
- Light Attacks:
Name of the technique Chain Style Steel Bind![You're supposed to replace "Name of the technique" with the name of your technique.]
Technique Level: 1
Technique Range: 10m [The range of this binding attack can be no more than 10 feet, since your chain is only 10 feet long. I would recommend making your chain at least 100m long and rolling it up inside your cyborg body. And to explain how that much stuff fits inside your body, just increase your character's height to something like 10 feet. (and weight to at least a 1000 lbs.) Otherwise, you might have to ditch the idea of using a chain altogether unless you want your binding range to be nerfed.]
Technique Cooldown: 1
Technique Duration: 1
Technique Buffs: 10% on attack
Technique Debuffs: 10% on defense [Make sure you clarify who is affected by these buffs and debuffs in each one of your techniques. For example, "10% to user's defense" and "10% to user's attack".]
Technique Description: The user is able to throw the other end of his chain to tight around any part of the body. If pulled even tighter, this can lead to blood circulation cut off or worse.
Name of the technique Chain Style Steel Spike Bind!
Technique Level: 10 [This is supposed to be a level 5 light technique and you're missing a second level 1 light technique.]
Technique Range: 100 [Also, again, the range can be no longer than 10 feet for a bind technique with your chain's current length.]
Technique Cooldown: 3 post
Technique Duration: 1
Technique Buffs: 50% Attack [Reduce this buff and debuff to 20% and raise the cooldown to 5 posts.]
Technique Debuffs: 50% Defense
Technique Description: The advance successor of the steel bind technique, however, spikes are added to the chain and further giving the technique a higher chance of death.
- Medium Attacks:
Technique Name: Chain Style The Steel Whip!
Technique Level: 5 [You're missing a level 1 medium technique.]
Technique Range: 50m
Technique Cooldown: 3 [Raise the cooldown to 5 posts.]
Technique Duration: 1
Technique Buffs: 20% Attack
Technique Debuffs: 20% Reflex
Technique Description: The user will use his chain as a whip, which he will then use slash type strokes in order to cause pain to his enemies. [Keep in mind that these slashes will be flying slashes the way your chain is currently.]
- Heavy Attacks:
Technique Name: Chain Style One Hundred Spike Whips!
Technique Level: 10 [You're missing a level 1 heavy technique.]
Technique Range: 100m
Technique Cooldown: 4 [Raise the cooldown to 10 posts.]
Technique Duration: 2
Technique Buffs: 30% Attack , 30% Defense
Technique Debuffs: 30% Reflex , 30% Will Power
Technique Description: A perfect attack and defense type of technique, the user will move his arm at an extreme fast rate of performing 100 whips. Spikes being added to the technique, he will continue to strike till the third digit.
- AOE Attacks:
Technique Name: Chain Style The Spinning Spike Whip!
Technique Level: 10 [This is supposed to be a level 1 AoE.]
Technique Range: 100m [In this technique, the range should be "centered on self".]
Technique Radius: 100m [The radius can be no more than 2.5m for a level 1 AoE.]
Technique Cooldown: 15 [Change the cooldown to 25 posts.]
Technique Duration: 6
Technique Buffs: 50% Attack , 50% Defense
Technique Debuffs: Reflex 100% [Reduce the buffs and debuffs of these technique to half.]
Technique Description: The user will twirl there body in a fast and spinning a 360 motion. The chain they hold in their hand will be in a straight line and continue to spin along with the user. The spikes being added will leave a lasting impression on those who challenge the technique head on.
- Gray
[tracker=/t131-tracker-gray-starks#504]
Name : Gray
Epithet : "The Conqueror"; "Black Fist"
Age : 49
Height : 10'2" (310 cm)
Weight : 1043 lbs (473 kg)
Species/Tribe : Cyborg Human
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Lurking Legend (Former Yonkou)
Crew : Black Fist Pirates (Destroyed)
Ship : Sangria's Vane (Destroyed)
Crew Role : Captain (Former)
Devil Fruit : Pressure-Pressure Fruit
Bounty : [ber=r] 5,000,000,000
EXP Bonus : +0.20 (to all allies)
Income Bonus : +0.20
Shop Discount : -30%
Balance : [bel] 25,000,000,000
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Re: Chain Chain Style !
Mon Apr 10, 2017 8:27 pmFirstly, you may want to fix your formatting. You might be missing a bold closing tag somewhere.
For your second light technique, the level should 1, not 5.
For your third light technique, reduce the buff and debuff to 25% and increase the cooldown to 12 posts.
The reason why your light technique cooldowns are turning out so high is because you keep trying to give stat buffs and debuffs to them. You don't need to have stat buffs and debuffs for each technique. Those are optional. Damage dealing techniques don't require buffs/debuffs. Sorry if the template was not clear about that.
Even with that knowledge, if you choose to keep the stat buffs and debuffs for the rest of the techniques, apply the following additional corrections plus the light technique corrections mentioned above:
Make the cooldown of both medium attacks 7.
Increase the cooldown of the first heavy technique to 8.
For your second light technique, the level should 1, not 5.
For your third light technique, reduce the buff and debuff to 25% and increase the cooldown to 12 posts.
The reason why your light technique cooldowns are turning out so high is because you keep trying to give stat buffs and debuffs to them. You don't need to have stat buffs and debuffs for each technique. Those are optional. Damage dealing techniques don't require buffs/debuffs. Sorry if the template was not clear about that.
Even with that knowledge, if you choose to keep the stat buffs and debuffs for the rest of the techniques, apply the following additional corrections plus the light technique corrections mentioned above:
Make the cooldown of both medium attacks 7.
Increase the cooldown of the first heavy technique to 8.
- Gray
[tracker=/t131-tracker-gray-starks#504]
Name : Gray
Epithet : "The Conqueror"; "Black Fist"
Age : 49
Height : 10'2" (310 cm)
Weight : 1043 lbs (473 kg)
Species/Tribe : Cyborg Human
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Lurking Legend (Former Yonkou)
Crew : Black Fist Pirates (Destroyed)
Ship : Sangria's Vane (Destroyed)
Crew Role : Captain (Former)
Devil Fruit : Pressure-Pressure Fruit
Bounty : [ber=r] 5,000,000,000
EXP Bonus : +0.20 (to all allies)
Income Bonus : +0.20
Shop Discount : -30%
Balance : [bel] 25,000,000,000
[[strollingdeath]][[baneoftheweak]][[riseandshine]][[childofdestiny]][[freakofnature]]
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Posts : 3983
Re: Chain Chain Style !
Mon Apr 10, 2017 9:09 pmProofread the formatting before bumping. xD Your formatting is still messed up. (I personally don't care either way but you're the one who's going to have to keep looking at it and cursing yourself once it's locked.)
- Gray
[tracker=/t131-tracker-gray-starks#504]
Name : Gray
Epithet : "The Conqueror"; "Black Fist"
Age : 49
Height : 10'2" (310 cm)
Weight : 1043 lbs (473 kg)
Species/Tribe : Cyborg Human
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Lurking Legend (Former Yonkou)
Crew : Black Fist Pirates (Destroyed)
Ship : Sangria's Vane (Destroyed)
Crew Role : Captain (Former)
Devil Fruit : Pressure-Pressure Fruit
Bounty : [ber=r] 5,000,000,000
EXP Bonus : +0.20 (to all allies)
Income Bonus : +0.20
Shop Discount : -30%
Balance : [bel] 25,000,000,000
[[strollingdeath]][[baneoftheweak]][[riseandshine]][[childofdestiny]][[freakofnature]]
[[punchoutguru]][[dulcetvirtuoso]]
[[improviseadaptovercome]]
Posts : 3983
Re: Chain Chain Style !
Mon Apr 10, 2017 9:19 pm
Yurei Yagami wrote:Chain Style
Fighting Style: Chain Style
Weapon Utilization: Chain
Specialization: Mixture Of Both
Description: Carrying a specialized steel metal large chain that's 100m length and 500lb in weight. The chain can be used as a binding or slashing style of fighting. The chain can even form spikes all around itself when called for and these metal spikes are 5 inches in length.
Techniques
(The following techniques can either be all devil fruit techniques, or a combination of devil fruit, and natural/weapon techniques)
- Light Attacks:
Chain Style Steel Bind!
Technique Level: 1
Technique Range: 10m
Technique Cooldown: 4
Technique Duration: 1
Technique Buffs: 10% on attack on weapon
Technique Debuffs: 10% on defense on user
Technique Description: The user is able to throw the other end of his chain to tight around any part of the body. If pulled even tighter, this can lead to blood circulation cut off or worse.
Chain Style Steel Spike Cannon!
Technique Level: 1
Technique Range: 100
Technique Cooldown: 2
Technique Duration: N/A
Technique Buffs: N/A
Technique Debuffs: N/A
Technique Description: a ball of chain will fire out of his body or arms, being the size of a basketball and doing blunt damage instead of slashing.
Chain Style Chain Steel Spike Body
Technique Level: 10
Technique Range: 100m
Technique Cooldown: 3
Technique Duration: N/A
Technique Buffs: N/A
Technique Debuffs: N/A
Technique Description: The user will push forth his chain to wrap around the enemy's body entirely with spikes added to the chains.
- Medium Attacks:
Chain Style The Iron Whip
Technique Level: 1
Technique Range: 10m
Technique Cooldown: 7
Technique Duration: 2
Technique Buffs: 10% Attack To Weapon
Technique Debuffs: 10% Defense To User
Technique Description: The user is able to bring forth his chain and whip his enemies.
Technique Name: Chain Style The Steel Whip!
Technique Level: 5
Technique Range: 50m
Technique Cooldown: 7
Technique Duration: 1
Technique Buffs: 20% Attack to weapon
Technique Debuffs: 20% Reflex to user
Technique Description: The user will use his chain as a whip, which he will then use slash type strokes in order to cause pain to his enemies.
- Heavy Attacks:
Chain Style Ten Whips
Technique Level: 1
Technique Range: 10m
Technique Cooldown: 8
Technique Duration: 1
Technique Buffs: 10% to attack weapon
Technique Debuffs: 10% to defense user
Technique Description: the user is able to whip is chains ten times to his enemies with spikes on them.
Technique Name: Chain Style One Hundred Spike Whips!
Technique Level: 10
Technique Range: 100m
Technique Cooldown: 10
Technique Duration: 2
Technique Buffs: 30% Attack , 30% Defense [To Weapon // To User]
Technique Debuffs: 30% Reflex , 30% Will Power [To User // To User]
Technique Description: A perfect attack and defense type of technique, the user will move his arm at an extreme fast rate of performing 100 whips. Spikes being added to the technique, he will continue to strike till the third digit.
- AOE Attacks:
Technique Name: Chain Style The Spinning Spike Whip!
Technique Level: 1
Technique Range: Self
Technique Radius: 2.5
Technique Cooldown: 25
Technique Duration: 6
Technique Buffs: 25% Attack , 25% Defense [To Weapon//To Self]
Technique Debuffs: Reflex 50% [To Self]
Technique Description: The user will twirl there body in a fast and spinning a 360 motion. The chain they hold in their hand will be in a straight line and continue to spin along with the user. The spikes being added will leave a lasting impression on those who challenge the technique head on.
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