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Elite Fighting Style Empty Elite Fighting Style

This post has in-line assessment comments.Sat Aug 10, 2019 5:20 pm

Elite Fighting Style


Fighting Style: Elite Fighting Style
Weapon Utilization: Sword and Martial Arts
Description: A style of swordsmanship refined by years of adventure and battler, passed from Master Higurashi to Zeref as a young teenager of Snow-Hawk Island. For years Master Higurashi had perfect a beautiful combination of martial arts and rapier swordsmanship, though finding only one who would be able to bother use and even refine the art itself, young Zeref.


Toggled and Passive Abilities:

Passive Ability: Through refining the craft through his years as a Marine, Zeref is capable of increasing his Reflexes with his sharpened focus by 10% however when he focuses it equally weakens his defensiveness by 10%.


Techniques



Light Techniques:

Medium Techniques:

Heavy Techniques:

AoE Techniques:






Last edited by Zeref on Sun Aug 11, 2019 8:54 pm; edited 5 times in total
Gray
Gray
The Conqueror / Black Fist
[tracker=/t131-tracker-gray-starks#504]
Name : Gray
Epithet : "The Conqueror"; "Black Fist"
Age : 49
Height : 10'2" (310 cm)
Weight : 1043 lbs (473 kg)
Species : Cyborg Human
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Lurking Legend (Former Yonkou)
Crew : Black Fist Pirates (Destroyed)
Ship : Sangria's Vane (Destroyed)
Crew Role : Captain (Former)
Devil Fruit : Pressure-Pressure Fruit
Bounty : [ber=r] 5,000,000,000
EXP Bonus : +0.20 (to all allies)
Income Bonus : +0.20
Shop Discount : -30%
Balance : [bel] 25,000,000,000
[[strollingdeath]][[baneoftheweak]][[riseandshine]][[childofdestiny]][[freakofnature]]
[[punchoutguru]][[dulcetvirtuoso]]

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Elite Fighting Style Empty Re: Elite Fighting Style

This post has in-line assessment comments.Sun Aug 11, 2019 2:55 pm
[You're on the right track, just need a revision. Please see the comments and adjust accordingly. Thanks! (Comments in brown.) ]

Zeref wrote:

Elite Fighting Style


Fighting Style: Elite Fighting Style
Weapon Utilization: Sword and Martial Arts
Description: A style of swordsmanship refined by years of adventure and battler, passed from Master Higurashi to Zeref as a young teenager of Snow-Hawk Island. For years Master Higurashi had perfect a beautiful combination of martial arts and rapier swordsmanship, though finding only one who would be able to bother use and even refine the art itself, young Zeref.


Toggled and Passive Abilities:

Passive Ability: Through refining the craft through his years as a Marine, Zeref is capable of increasing his Reflexes with his sharpened focus by 10% however when he focuses it equally weakens his defensiveness by 10%.


Techniques



Light Techniques:

Medium Techniques:

Heavy Techniques:

AoE Techniques:




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Elite Fighting Style Empty Re: Elite Fighting Style

This post has in-line assessment comments.Sun Aug 11, 2019 7:37 pm
I edited, please have a second look and let me know if I got them all.
Gray
Gray
The Conqueror / Black Fist
[tracker=/t131-tracker-gray-starks#504]
Name : Gray
Epithet : "The Conqueror"; "Black Fist"
Age : 49
Height : 10'2" (310 cm)
Weight : 1043 lbs (473 kg)
Species : Cyborg Human
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Lurking Legend (Former Yonkou)
Crew : Black Fist Pirates (Destroyed)
Ship : Sangria's Vane (Destroyed)
Crew Role : Captain (Former)
Devil Fruit : Pressure-Pressure Fruit
Bounty : [ber=r] 5,000,000,000
EXP Bonus : +0.20 (to all allies)
Income Bonus : +0.20
Shop Discount : -30%
Balance : [bel] 25,000,000,000
[[strollingdeath]][[baneoftheweak]][[riseandshine]][[childofdestiny]][[freakofnature]]
[[punchoutguru]][[dulcetvirtuoso]]

[[improviseadaptovercome]]
Posts : 3928

Elite Fighting Style Empty Re: Elite Fighting Style

This post has in-line assessment comments.Sun Aug 11, 2019 8:22 pm
Please remove the duration field from all Flat (non-hybrid) techniques.
The duration of a Flat technique is not 1 post because it deals its damage immediately. (You can have effects from its flavour text last longer, but the mechanical damage should still be dealt immediately.)
Cooldown for Divine Justice should be 9 posts. (5 base cooldown + 4 duration)
Cooldown for both AoEs should be 11 posts. (7 base cooldown + 4 duration)
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Elite Fighting Style Empty Re: Elite Fighting Style

This post has in-line assessment comments.Sun Aug 11, 2019 8:34 pm
Re-edited, Please let me know how to proceed further. Also thanks for your time.
Gray
Gray
The Conqueror / Black Fist
[tracker=/t131-tracker-gray-starks#504]
Name : Gray
Epithet : "The Conqueror"; "Black Fist"
Age : 49
Height : 10'2" (310 cm)
Weight : 1043 lbs (473 kg)
Species : Cyborg Human
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Lurking Legend (Former Yonkou)
Crew : Black Fist Pirates (Destroyed)
Ship : Sangria's Vane (Destroyed)
Crew Role : Captain (Former)
Devil Fruit : Pressure-Pressure Fruit
Bounty : [ber=r] 5,000,000,000
EXP Bonus : +0.20 (to all allies)
Income Bonus : +0.20
Shop Discount : -30%
Balance : [bel] 25,000,000,000
[[strollingdeath]][[baneoftheweak]][[riseandshine]][[childofdestiny]][[freakofnature]]
[[punchoutguru]][[dulcetvirtuoso]]

[[improviseadaptovercome]]
Posts : 3928

Elite Fighting Style Empty Re: Elite Fighting Style

This post has in-line assessment comments.Sun Aug 11, 2019 8:56 pm
Approved! Thanks for your patience.


Zeref wrote:

Elite Fighting Style


Fighting Style: Elite Fighting Style
Weapon Utilization: Sword and Martial Arts
Description: A style of swordsmanship refined by years of adventure and battler, passed from Master Higurashi to Zeref as a young teenager of Snow-Hawk Island. For years Master Higurashi had perfect a beautiful combination of martial arts and rapier swordsmanship, though finding only one who would be able to bother use and even refine the art itself, young Zeref.


Toggled and Passive Abilities:

Passive Ability: Through refining the craft through his years as a Marine, Zeref is capable of increasing his Reflexes with his sharpened focus by 10% however when he focuses it equally weakens his defensiveness by 10%.


Techniques



Light Techniques:

Medium Techniques:

Heavy Techniques:

AoE Techniques:




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